100 WC- WIDE, ORANGE, CROCODILE, WITHIN, COLLASPED

“Bang” the building erupted in flames, the crowd was screaming I could hear myself screaming “Mum, Dad” I was shoved onto the gravel by the wide spread crowd. I could hear the sirens coming closer and closer but then the building collapsed.

I groggily opened my eyes to find that I was in the hospital I couldn’t move my right leg or left arm, “John your awake!” screamed my mother with joy in her voice, “Greg come quickly our son is awake” “thump, thump came the sound of my dad’s footsteps” hello son” he said then he gave me a book and within there was a picture of a crocodile.

One Comment

  1. Finn Darlington

    Good sizzling start. I liked how the last time the character was in a building then Boom! he is in a hospital.

    Great job Ethan

    Finn

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